unit 3: community story sample freewrite excerpt and goldmining session Freewrite excerpt: "... I can't wait until school is over because next week I get to go to King's Dominion. the summer's almost over and I haven't even been yet. I haven't been in so long. Last time I went I didn't even get to go with my friends. I was bringing a group of kids there. trying to impress her with my community work. Getting here was a heroic effort. up at 4:30 this morning in the cool dark, alarm clock blaring fuzz from the radio - just how I felt. Headache of awakening and stomach hungry but not ready to eat ..." Writing Coach/Teacher asks: What do you remember from the freewrite? What was cool? Team member: She can't wait to go to King's Dominion. She hasn't been yet this summer. WC writes: can't wait to go to King's Dominion/hasn't been yet this summer WC: okay, great. What else did she mention about King's Dominion? Another team member: Last time she went, she didn't get to go with her friends. WC writes: last time at King's Dominion, didn't get to go with her friends WC: Who did she go with? Team member: She took kids to King's Dominion to impress someone with her community work. WC writes: took kids from community to impress someone WC (to the author): Who were you trying to impress? Author: I wanted to impress my mom. She keeps saying I don't do enough for the church. WC writes: wanted to impress mom/don't do enough for church WC: Do you agree with what your mom said? Author: I didn't then, but I do now. WC: What's different now? What did you learn from your King's Dominion trip? Author: I really enjoyed myself. I started volunteering to help kids more after that. WC: What have you done with kids since then? Author: I mentor a group of students every week now at church. WC writes: enjoyed King's Dominion with kids/volunteers to mentor kids at church WC: What else did you find interesting in her freewrite? Another team member: She's tired. WC writes: tired WC: Good. And what else? What imagery did she use? How do we know she was tired? Another team member: She had a headache and was tired. WC (to the author): Would you mind reading exactly what you said? WC writes: alarm clock blaring fuzz from radio/Headache of awakening and stomach. Hungry but not ready to eat. LeSSon 15: GoLDmInInG AnD DRAFtInG 137