STUDENT HANDOUT unit 4: personal statement lesson 18: adding heartbeat outcome: Peer Edit and revise your personal statement to include "heartbeat." where am i? DIRECTIONS: Read the following excerpts from two real-life personal statements. Then, fill in the chart summarizing the sensory details each author used. "It feels good out here!" I couldn't help but say it twice to my friends Chris, Mike, and Jay. We had been in the house since early evening playing JFortnite on Xbox. We decided to make ham sandwiches and go sit out on the front porch. We went outside at around 10 o'clock with our food and some Pepsi to enjoy the nice, cool night. The time passed so quickly that what seemed an hour turned into three. Around 1:15 am we noticed a decline in the warm temperature so we decided to head inside for the night. . . . from "I Am" by Dale Scott Things you can almost see Things you can almost feel Things you can almost smell Things you can almost taste Things you can almost hear Overall tone: For as long as I can remember, fireworks have been an important part of my life. On nights of celebration, such as the Fourth of July and Cinco de Mayo, I would cross the long street from my neatly kept apartment building to the lush green park next door. The warm air carried the familiar smells of late night barbecues and sounds of upbeat Spanish music. I loved to watch the clear dark sky burst into colorful flowers of light, dancing fearlessly as the music from the crowds below cheered them on. Even though the nights would end too soon, the fireworks would stay with me. from "Firecracker" by Marcia Rodriguez Things you can almost see Things you can almost feel Things you can almost smell Things you can almost taste Things you can almost hear Overall tone: LESSON 18: ADDING HEARTBEAT Property of PeerForward/© 2020 PeerForward; All Rights Reserved. lesson 18: adding heartbeat 187